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Post by haruki on Apr 23, 2011 23:58:57 GMT -5
Character name: Haruki Uchiha Character age: 14 Character gender: Female Ninja Rank: Ambu Village Inhabited: Konohagakure Karma Type: Good Personality: She can be serious at times,but is mostly cheerful *Height: 5'7 *Weight: 105 lbs *Blood Type: A- *Top Measures: classified History: Uchiha Haruki was born in Konohagakure and was raised by her parents.After her parents died she's been a totaly different person.Haruki has been to herself ever since.She doesn't have siblings. When her parents died she trained every day and got on any mission she could to get stronger so she could help her friends and anyone in need. Element: Fire *Kekkei Genkai: Sharingan Attachments:
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Post by Chie Masami on Apr 24, 2011 0:16:52 GMT -5
Okay, several problems. 1. I like it how you get every part of the template, I'll compliment you on that. However, your picture on the avatar and picture given in profile are different. What's up with that?  2. You're missing a LOT on history. To begin with, parents don't just go ahead and die, there's a reason for why they are dead. Also, nothing is mentioned about your character getting an ANBU rank, I could just suppose she's 14 and still in Academy just because you mentioned she trains. Also, how was she before her parents died? In personality you were supposed to mention everything needed for character development. A "completely different person" after that incident shows a lot of required detail, whereas you give nearly non in your section. Please add more detail to both sections. 3. Are you sure you don't want any Jutsus at all to start with although you're ANBU ranked? Because, well, that seems pretty impossible for me. 4. You didn't declare the rules' phrase. I'm sorry, but it is necessary to prove you've read the rules. So please add that. |
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Post by Chie Masami on Apr 26, 2011 13:27:38 GMT -5
Much better. Rules' Phrase can be found in Site Rules, located in the "Guides" board. Please find the correct one and then you're off to go.  |
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Post by haruki on Apr 28, 2011 17:08:10 GMT -5
Character age: 14 Character gender: Female Ninja Rank: chunin Village Inhabited: Konohagakure Karma Type: Good Personality: Haruki is a sweet girl who cares for others and is very loyal to her friends.Haruki gets along with almost everyone she meets.Haruki perfers to train with others then by herself.She cares for her friends and her village so she makes sure nothing bad is happening to her village and her friends.She like to speak from her heart and doesnt like to talk from the mind so if she feels what someone is doing is wrong she tell right then and there.Haruki likes to goof off at times just to have a good laugh,but she has a serious side as well.Haruki is very loyal and if she makes a promise she sticks to it until the promise is fufilled. *Height: 5'7 *Weight: 105 lbs *Blood Type: A- *Top Measures: classified History: Uchiha Haruki was born in Konohagakure and was raised by her parents Kiro and Suki.At a young age her father trained her every chance they got her mother helped when her father went on missions. While she was in the acadamy she worked harder then most of her classmates she was one of the smartest as well.Haruki and her classmastes pushed and encouraged Haruki for her to always do well. After she left the academy one of her teachers trained her with the help of her dad Haruki wishes to be the best she can. Element: Fire *Kekkei Genkai: Sharingan *rules phrase:Yabureru~ Attachments:
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Post by Chie Masami on Apr 28, 2011 19:32:23 GMT -5
Approved! Welcome to the site! |
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